tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.comments2023-04-28T04:29:07.105-05:00Pulp FictioneerJ. S. Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01862522545823003315noreply@blogger.comBlogger33125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-18703272784140395772011-10-28T16:20:45.997-05:002011-10-28T16:20:45.997-05:00Nice ending! No pun intended, well yes it was...Ha...Nice ending! No pun intended, well yes it was...Hahaha!<br />Great use of the prompt too! Welcome to the Fictioneers!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-79121028500128832612011-10-28T15:17:35.428-05:002011-10-28T15:17:35.428-05:00The revolver ought to do it...
Well done, RobinThe revolver ought to do it...<br /><br />Well done, RobinAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-87634561242952066732011-10-28T13:48:00.311-05:002011-10-28T13:48:00.311-05:00Doug, an old school D&D module made a referenc...Doug, an old school D&D module made a reference to it.J. S. Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01862522545823003315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-47757694681033753082011-10-28T13:42:10.774-05:002011-10-28T13:42:10.774-05:00Blinded by the light? Loved this story, jS. Did yo...Blinded by the light? Loved this story, jS. Did you look up, or make up 'Occulus Demonicus'? Either way, i enjoyed the story. Good job.<br /><br />Aloha,<br />DougAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-35005693828167192262011-10-28T10:49:21.349-05:002011-10-28T10:49:21.349-05:00Very smooth! I like that, but I have a feeling Hol...Very smooth! I like that, but I have a feeling Hollingsworth will see the abyss in a way he didn't expect, LOL.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-91805117496073989002011-10-28T09:26:32.751-05:002011-10-28T09:26:32.751-05:00What an interesting twist - I liked how you moved ...What an interesting twist - I liked how you moved the photo prompt to a different genre! Hollingsworth is a bad man - who's going to get him?!<br /><br />I'm afraid a lot of characters are in for a surprise this Friday.<br />http://wp.me/p1MNJe-9V<br /><br />Have a great weekend!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-86176763259798352332011-10-28T09:25:14.743-05:002011-10-28T09:25:14.743-05:00Never trust a man named Hollingsworth, as my dad a...Never trust a man named Hollingsworth, as my dad always used to say. Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-24774343269580945502011-10-21T21:00:05.547-05:002011-10-21T21:00:05.547-05:00Bwahahaha. Love this! Especially the last line. Wo...Bwahahaha. Love this! Especially the last line. Wonderfully wicked!Thomma Lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12490964079393282131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-67472646353746765352011-10-21T17:08:03.997-05:002011-10-21T17:08:03.997-05:00Hi J.S.
Loved your story. Something you might con...Hi J.S.<br /><br />Loved your story. Something you might consider. Instead of the word 'people' in the last sentence, change it to 'kids'. Would still be menacing to the children but would add to his mystery to adults reading.<br /><br />Just rambling here. Your work is always so well realized I usually never say a word.<br /><br />Aloha,<br /><br />DougAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-63502853527328599302011-10-21T15:07:41.973-05:002011-10-21T15:07:41.973-05:00My favorite lines were "Sam Hell had come to ...My favorite lines were "Sam Hell had come to town." and "...curtains whisked closed." Those stood out the most to me. The bold statement of Sam Hell coming to town, should put the fear in all of us. As for the curtains whisking closed...I just loved the description. :PMahjirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04685917075106367032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-11991276580035960692011-10-21T14:56:32.023-05:002011-10-21T14:56:32.023-05:00Yep I had to cut the tumbleweeds to make the 100 w...Yep I had to cut the tumbleweeds to make the 100 words. :)J. S. Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01862522545823003315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-64626009954879013402011-10-21T14:43:58.865-05:002011-10-21T14:43:58.865-05:00"Sam Hell had come to town."
LoL. For ..."Sam Hell had come to town."<br /><br />LoL. For some reason, that was my favorite line. I could hear this dramatic male voice saying it in my head...<br /><br />The whole mood of this story is just great. I can almost hear the wind tossing tumbleweeds around with the kids just staring at each other afterwards like:<br /><br /><_<<br /><br />...<br /><br />>_>Tiyana Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11022663279469468201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-4046276567173433702011-10-21T13:49:12.286-05:002011-10-21T13:49:12.286-05:00Oh no! I hope the kids get away!Oh no! I hope the kids get away!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-3531792526496688112011-10-21T13:20:37.148-05:002011-10-21T13:20:37.148-05:00Haha! You called it a 'shooter' :) That...Haha! You called it a 'shooter' :) That's what I had in mind on mine and it's pretty neat that you've also included a different sort of 'shooter' in the mix.<br /><br />Great story :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-58402102374717839522011-10-21T11:38:41.263-05:002011-10-21T11:38:41.263-05:00Oh I really liked this! I liked the way the danger...Oh I really liked this! I liked the way the dangerous gunslinger (at least that's what my mind supplied) talked to the kids and warned them about the questions. Yet he seemed almost playful with them too. Nicely done. I really enjoyed this one, JS!Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00595776353171184107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-67996744344603654342011-10-21T11:03:48.458-05:002011-10-21T11:03:48.458-05:00Thanks I had found this myself but posted the wron...Thanks I had found this myself but posted the wrong copy, oopsJ. S. Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01862522545823003315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-61389727999181532092011-10-21T10:48:52.200-05:002011-10-21T10:48:52.200-05:00This is really enchanting. Needs a little editing ...This is really enchanting. Needs a little editing though, so if you have a chance, close the curtains instead of shutting them (two shuts in a paragraph). Otherwise evocative and jokey too!Linda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-5337796011399206582011-10-16T09:47:28.462-05:002011-10-16T09:47:28.462-05:00Love "the impenetrable morass of the dark woo...Love "the impenetrable morass of the dark woods." You definitely succeeded with creepy!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-46542648283869370922011-10-14T17:41:05.995-05:002011-10-14T17:41:05.995-05:00That guy's home is one spooky place.That guy's home is one spooky place.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-54790628446063306682011-10-14T16:50:05.853-05:002011-10-14T16:50:05.853-05:00Great post! The descriptions are amazing! This is ...Great post! The descriptions are amazing! This is so well written and the last line is so dramatic. Welcome to the group!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-66190751135174925872011-10-14T16:03:20.985-05:002011-10-14T16:03:20.985-05:00This story had the sense of a homecoming that was ...This story had the sense of a homecoming that was spooky, but handled just right. I got stuck on the sentence with 'the impenetrable morass of the dark wood' as I thought it was referring to the 'wood' of the old house, which would have made 'morass' a strange choice of words. Upon rereading it twice I figured it out. An 's' added to the word 'wood' would have smoothed my way.<br /><br />Or perhaps I'm just a little slow on the uptake. Either way, great story. (JBHardy is right, watch out when you go to leave.)<br /><br />Aloha,<br /><br />DougAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-20914717968247057142011-10-14T14:16:42.268-05:002011-10-14T14:16:42.268-05:00Yipe! The hair raised on the back of my neck!Yipe! The hair raised on the back of my neck!Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00595776353171184107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-35641966831342030592011-10-14T14:07:43.862-05:002011-10-14T14:07:43.862-05:00Macabre. Makes me want to flip on all the lights i...Macabre. Makes me want to flip on all the lights in the room when I read it. Great job. ;)Mahjirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04685917075106367032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-43893893228231499892011-10-14T12:55:52.741-05:002011-10-14T12:55:52.741-05:00Mwahahaha... I love the atmosphere of your story.Mwahahaha... I love the atmosphere of your story.Tiyana Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11022663279469468201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3587666135585806292.post-49689256285908009792011-10-14T12:47:27.924-05:002011-10-14T12:47:27.924-05:00Has a nice Lovecraftian flavor! Just the right kin...Has a nice Lovecraftian flavor! Just the right kind of darkness to fascinate me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com